Your soul…
It’s the flowers.
From the deepest pond,
Of which the fish
Are afraid
To meet the eyes
For fear
Of being judged.
Your look
Is of the dandylion who was blown away
What’s this? I’m lost. I can’t find it.
What’s that, sir?
My place in the garden.
It’s gone.
The weeds have taken over.
Your hands
They fidget
Uncertain like the spider,
Stuck in his web of…
White lies.
Yours truly,
Is the most sincere
Pair of unmatched socks
Your queer stripes,
of uncany pride,
They hurt your inner ego,
As laughter is to be heard
Across the hall.
Your lips hesitate
To speak
The words
You buried in the earth long ago
Should you cross?
It’s just a bridge of bandages
Overused
Take care
Of where you tred
Take hold of the handle
Make sure
You hold on tight.
For the grip of the world is upon you.
Looking back at this, it sounds really cheesy. -__-
1 comment:
OH MY GOD, it is NOT CHEESY! I LOVE IT! SEND IT TO A POETRY CONTEST NOW!!! YOU WILL WIN!!!!
Syama, your poetry is amazing. I LOVE it. There are a couple spelling mistakes (dandylion is dandelion, tred is tread), but other than that, this really resounds. It has this feeling of regret and sadness and fear, and anticipation of being overwhelmed.
I love the fish fearful of being judged.
I love the "My place in the garden, it's gone."
I love the "uncertain like the spider, stuck in his web of white lies."
I love it all! And comparing 'yours truly' to a pair of unmatched socks...the "words buried in the earth long ago" sounds so MYSTICAL and intriguing!
I am in love with this poem. Does it have a name? Perhaps "the grip of the world," or just "grip." Wow, I love it. It's verypowerful. It speaks a message. I love how you compare abstract things to things that we can understand, like spiders and things. And the idea that the flower is sad because it lost its spot in the garden...it's so...I don't know what the word is.
Write more, write more! That's all I can say. I am ever your fan.
You should publish a book of poetry. Seriously.
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