The tune
It's your voice
Of you heart
It's so queer,
With that hidden
Smile.
Forget the words
They mean nothing.
It's the notes
The high and low
That makes these
Days so fine.
Sunday, June 17, 2007
:D
I was listening to one of those upbeat songs and I kind of felt like writing something, anything, so this is what I got. (I am in desperate need of inspiration!)
1 comment:
Hmm, I like it!
I would like to point out though, your typo in line 3; it should be 'your' instead of 'you." Also in the first line, I think maybe "the" voice instead of "your" might work better, but I'm not sure.
Isn't it neat how music can inspire?
I like the idea behind this that it's the tune that matters, not the words. And the overall mood is happy.
I would like to see something more, I dunno...intense, from you. Like something filled with anger, or sadness, or confusion. I know those are all negative, so not necessarily negative. Maybe a scene with dancers, since you like music so much, and you could describe the outfits and colors and how the music makes a character feel, I dunno.
You need to find something you really care about, can really feel strongly about and emote for, and just...write whatever flows from your fingers.
But I like your little poems, too. They're very cute, and contemplative, and you choose your words nicely. :D
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